Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Some people believe that
music
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can promote a strong social
cohesion
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achieving
higher degree
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a higher degree
of social integration, which in my opinion can be true to some extent. From my personal standpoint,
music
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, like other types of art, has its cultural
properties making
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properties, making
it difficult to be understood by people of different cultures and ages.
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However it
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However, it
shares some common interest between different groups of people.
Music
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have a lot of types. Rock, Pop, Metal, House are some examples of
music
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genres which are different in musical instruments, tempo and lyrics and they are popular
between
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among
different groups of people in a country. Wide variety of
music
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taste
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tastes
can be a divisive issue which can loosen social
cohesion
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. Development in
music
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is
also
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inevitable.
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is the main reason why I can't tolerate listening to my father's
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
music
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and he can't do the same.
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, due to the fact that some piece of art can gain popularity, having common
music
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interests between young and old people can bring people of different ages together.
This
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is
also
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happens shared
music
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between different cultures.
For
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example some
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example, some
of Iranian people like to listen Turkish
music
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which can be helpful in social
cohesion
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in both countries.
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, there are unquestionable positive impacts of
music
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in social
cohesion
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, I believe that
music
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can not
can not
cannot
be used as a good way to bring people from different ages and cultures together.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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