Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Some people believe that

music

can promote a strong social

cohesion

achieving

higher degree

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a higher degree

of social integration, which in my opinion can be true to some extent. From my personal standpoint,

music

, like other types of art, has its cultural

properties making

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properties, making

it difficult to be understood by people of different cultures and ages.

However it

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However, it

shares some common interest between different groups of people.

Music

have a lot of types. Rock, Pop, Metal, House are some examples of

music

genres which are different in musical instruments, tempo and lyrics and they are popular

between

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among

different groups of people in a country. Wide variety of

music

taste

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tastes

can be a divisive issue which can loosen social

cohesion

. Development in

music

also

inevitable.

This

is the main reason why I can't tolerate listening to my father's

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

music

and he can't do the same.

On the other hand

, due to the fact that some piece of art can gain popularity, having common

music

interests between young and old people can bring people of different ages together.

This

also

happens shared

music

between different cultures.

For

example some

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example, some

of Iranian people like to listen Turkish

music

which can be helpful in social

cohesion

in both countries.

However

, there are unquestionable positive impacts of

music

in social

cohesion

, I believe that

music

can not

cannot

be used as a good way to bring people from different ages and cultures together.

Wed Dec 11 2019

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