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In many places New homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there what is your opinion about this

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
As the population
swiftly increase
Suggestion
swiftly increases
 in numerous areas of cities that leads the immense requirement of housing.
where
Suggestion
Where
 as a number of people demand to construct residence societies in those places which are outskirts of cities while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 are against to
this
 proposal proposal.
well
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
, I suppose building housing societies in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 could cause devastation to the nature
protection
Suggestion
Protection
 of environment is the key factor to save the living being.
due
Suggestion
Due
 to the industrialisation climate has been changed drastically.
to
Suggestion
To
 develop housing scheme constructions companies have started degradation of trees to get the piece of fertile lands.
this
Suggestion
This
 phenomena encourages the wild animal to evacuate the land and lost
it it's
Accept comma addition
it, it's
 beautiful sight scenes as well as reduction in cultivation.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
this
 could cost a lot for
next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
 in a form of polluted air as well as lack of food that promotes starvation.
despite
Suggestion
Despite
 all these facts builders should change their strategies by constructing vertical
housing housing
Accept comma addition
housing, housing
 schemes like skyscrapers or build multiple high rising stories building because of that the extensive demand of housing could have been fulfilled.
although
Suggestion
Although
, authorities or government should execute the plan to
planted
Suggestion
plant
 trees on top of each high rising building.
Thus
,
this
 act
will helps
Suggestion
will help
 to maintain the nature and its courses all over the cities.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, planting trees
also
 provide assistance for the supply of clean and fresh air, fruits and so on.
to
Suggestion
To
 sum up all the statements, I personally believe that human needs often leads to
catastroph
an event resulting in great loss and misfortune
catastrophe
catastrophes
 the safety measures are not
be
Suggestion
being
 pursued sincerely.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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