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In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages?

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Food
 Production is bringing an alluring twist in
this
 jet set world. In many countries people prefer consuming
food
 which is grown outside their
country
. Some people laud its
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
 and relatively low cost. In
this
 essay I would like to argue that
this
 approach has many cons than the pros. In any
country
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country's
food
 production is one of the major revenue generating sector. 25 percent of the income depends on
this
 revenue. If people prefer
food
 which has been produced in other countries
,
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,
then
this
 will lead to a significant loss
for
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of
 their
country
.
This
 will
also
 impact many
food
 retail industries.
Food
 retail industries will face
huge loss
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a huge loss
huge losses
.
This
circuituously
not in a forthright manner
circuitously
 decreases the
food
 production for
future
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the future
,
thus
 the people of future generation will face
food
 crisis. Not only
this
, if other countries stopped exporting their
food
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food, then
then
 it will create
huge problem
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huge problems
a huge problem
 for
food
.
Further and
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Further, and
 most importantly,
this
 trend will
also
 impact the employment ratio of the
country
. If
food
 sector faces
loss
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loss, then
then
 big
food
 chains like
kfc
 and
mcdonals
 will fire many people
this
 will
also
impacts
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impact
 the economy of the
country
. Occupations like farming and people who work at restaurants will lose their job and creates a huge problem for the
country
. In Conclusion,
food
 consumption will increase as the population increases. Public awareness campaigns warning people about the danger of the trends will be warranted.

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