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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
number
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 of Canadian
students
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graduated
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who graduated
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 over a period of 15 years.
It is clear that
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 the amount of both male and female
students
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increases
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increase
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 between 1992 and 2007, but the
number
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 of female
graduates
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 significantly exceeds the
number
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 of male
graduates
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. In 1992, just under 100.000
of
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apply
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women
were
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apply
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graduated from Canadian universities.
This
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number
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 was slightly fluctuating at around 100.000
people
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 from 1993 to 2001 until its trend rose dramatically from about 110.000
people
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 in 2002 to over 140.000
people
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 in 2007. With regards to male
graduates
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,
it is clear that
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 their
number
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well
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is well
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 under female
students
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.
In
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At
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 the beginning of the given period, the
amount
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number
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 of men
graduated
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who graduated
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 from universities was just above 70.000
people
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. There was a slight rose to about 78.000
students
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 over the
next
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 3 years, but
then
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 the trend with fluctuations experienced a fall to about 72.000
people
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 in 1998 and a rise to about 75.000
graduates
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 in 2000. After that, the
number
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 surged gradually to just above 90.000
students
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in
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at
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 the end of the given period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, graduates, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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