The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph compares the
number
of Canadian
students
graduated
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who graduated
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over a period of 15 years.
It is clear that
the amount of both male and female
students
increases
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increase
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between 1992 and 2007, but the
number
of female
graduates
significantly exceeds the
number
of male
graduates
. In 1992, just under 100.000
of
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apply
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women
were
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apply
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graduated from Canadian universities.
This
number
was slightly fluctuating at around 100.000
people
from 1993 to 2001 until its trend rose dramatically from about 110.000
people
in 2002 to over 140.000
people
in 2007. With regards to male
graduates
,
it is clear that
their
number
well
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is well
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under female
students
.
In
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At
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the beginning of the given period, the
amount
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number
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of men
graduated
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who graduated
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from universities was just above 70.000
people
. There was a slight rose to about 78.000
students
over the
next
3 years, but
then
the trend with fluctuations experienced a fall to about 72.000
people
in 1998 and a rise to about 75.000
graduates
in 2000. After that, the
number
surged gradually to just above 90.000
students
in
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at
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the end of the given period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, graduates, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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