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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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In recent times, the
usage
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use
 of additives in
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 production industry has increased enormously.
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, to enhance the shelve-lives
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with
 products many
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 manufacturing companies
use
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preservatives
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 in them, due to which health several issues have been emerged. But, are there any benefits from it as well? In
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 essay, I will present my views and draw some conclusions. Let us start by looking at some of the positives of using additives in
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 products, one of the major benefits from using
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preservatives
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 can be its prevention
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of
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 poisoning. According to the health studies, the
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 used by companies as per the government guidelines are safe since it
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avoids
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the risks
 of cross contamination in
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 products which cause
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 poisoning and other
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 related problems. Another advantage of these chemicals is that, it can be really helpful for the people who have
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 related allergies.
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, the person who is allergic from gluten, there are various
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 items available in the market which is gluten-free and ensures safety. Looking at the other side of the argument, in a long run, allowing
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 chemicals in our diet can be harmful. In many states, companies are regularly monitored and some were found using
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a high percentage
high percentages
 of chemicals in their products, which can lead to high risk of bone damage and serious illness like cancer. On the other side, agriculture industries
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have also started
had also started
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 started using chemicals which destroy the soil fertility. To illustrate, many farmers
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 pesticides on their crops to prevent from worms and other living creatures.
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 process could make soil damage
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to
 irrigation in
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the future
. To conclude, the
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 of
preservatives
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 can have many disadvantages to it.
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, in my opinion, its
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 should be limited for people with special
dietery
of or relating to the diet
dietary
 restrictions and
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 safety purposes.

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