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These days more and more people are going to other countries for a significant period of time either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, it is a widely popular concept amongst youths to move to a foreign land for the purpose of education or a job.
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 idea is beneficial in many prospectives for an individual, it has some drawbacks as well. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss some advantages of living abroad as well as I will address some key problems related to it. To start with, one of the upside of moving abroad for millennials is to have better
life
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 opportunities in comparison with their host country. To explain
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, many people, in order to grow their career often focus on working in an international job market where they can develop more skills related to their trade or prefer having higher education abroad. Another positive side of living abroad for many individuals is to support their families in
home country
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the home country
. Most of the people who are living abroad are saving money to financially help their family member or to invest in after retirement. To see the other side of the argument, there are many disadvantages to
life
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 in foreign as well.
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, to experience a culture shock is a setback for many
new comers
any new participant in some activity
newcomers
 to foreign countries. Every country has their own lifestyle and standards of living which
makes
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make
 many unprepared individuals who are not aware of it, frustrated and depressed.
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in addition
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, often people gradually start losing their contact with loved ones
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 as friends and families due to the certain factors
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 as different timing and working condition.
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make
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makes
 feel isolated from the social
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. To conclude, it is true that finding opportunities
abroad has
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abroad have
 many benefits to it for a long term.
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, it is important to understand that it takes some sacrifices in order to have a happy
life
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