Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Some people think that wealthy nations should support underdeveloped countries by providing food and education while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks that it is the responsibility of their own Government to look after their citizens. In my view, wealthy nation should provide assistance when there is scarcity of natural resources. There is no doubt, the Government has
obligation
Suggestion
an obligation
the obligation
for well being of its citizen. In Democratic
countries people
Accept comma addition
countries, people
elect their leaders and in return it is their primary duty to arrange for basic necessities and
remarkable education system
Suggestion
the remarkable education system
a remarkable education system
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
the
Governemnt
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
need
Suggestion
needs
to plan for long term growth by identifying and using the natural resources for economic growth. Lack of planning will cause
deprival
of people basic rights.
On the other hand
developed countries must raise their hand in support of countries with
lack
Suggestion
a lack
of natural
resources
Accept comma addition
resources, for
for example
, countries like Somalia
,
Accept space
,
people are facing severe shortage of clean water and basic foods, In these
circumtances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
the wealthy nation should come
farward
at or to or toward the front
forward
and support the local Government
becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
of the lack of fund they are unable to draw a long term plan. To conclude that developed countries should help
the poor
Suggestion
poorer
countries only in case they
dont
do not
don't
have natural resource
otheriwse
in other respects or ways
otherwise
others
it is the responsibility of later to
used
Suggestion
use
effectively their natural resources and improve their people education and basic necessities.
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