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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter

#holiday #item #travel #insurance #cost #manager #company
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter with regard to my lost
laptop
. I have travelled
in
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 Paris at the
last
 week. When I came back
my
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home I saw that I have lost my
laptop
. Its properties are Toshiba 650D, RAM 8GB with hard disc 1 TB.
Cost
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The cost
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 of my
laptop
 is $1650. There are three
sticker
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- Batman, Messi and Spiderman on
cover
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 of my
laptop
 that my little brother glues on it. It is very valuable for me. I think
insurance
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 company should return
value
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the value
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 of my notebook. Please report
me
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 that what I should do
on
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in
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next
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the next
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 step
this
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 process. I hope you will quickly initiate suitable solutions in regard to
this
 matter. Please respond at
the
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 earliest convenience. Yours sincerely Garay Ashirov
Submitted by garayasirov on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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