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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

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Language
 is most valuable invention humans ever had and it plays an essential role
for
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in
 communication. A number of languages extinct each year. Some people believe that it is not essential because
world
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the world
 will be easier with
the fewer
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the fewest
 languages. I firmly agree with the statement and would my views in the following paragraphs. In order to strengthen my perspective, I would like to assert that where globalization has given
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
 to expand the businesses from
one
country
 to another, it has
also
 become the
one
 major reason behind
extinction
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the extinction
 of some minority languages because increasing demand in
corporate world
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the corporate world
 of universal
language
 which is why
majority
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the majority
 of schools are teaching in English as global languages rather than native languages in term to get a better job.
Moreover
, migration
also
 plays a huge role behind
language
 death.
For instance
, children of immigrants in abroad do not speak their native
language
 fluently because of less preference to their own
language
.
Therefore
, various languages vanish almost every year. Moving
further
, fewer
language
 will be easy to learn and it will unite the whole world because of ease of communication between them.
For example
, there will be very little
language
 barrier or no barrier between
them which
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them, which
 mean that they will be able to work in other countries and interact with them.
Besides
, scientists will have been taking most advantage of that by sharing research on
particular topic
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particular topics
a particular topic
 and enhancing knowledge regarding that topic from other scientists of other countries. Apart from
this
, organizations
will have make
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will make
 huge profits because
language
 barriers will not be
big issue
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a big issue
 for them and it will be easy for them to research on their culture and their mindsets and expand in their
country
.
On the contrary
, cultures and tradition of
one
country
is directly connected
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are directly connected
 to
one
country
 and cultures with
vanish
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vanishing
 itself with the extinction of
language
 because there will be no
one
 to preserve these cultures.
Also
, people will lose their identity with the death of their
language
 and they will feel inferior towards other people and these people will be seen as lower value in front of native people because it will create
hierarchy
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a hierarchy
 in society. Adding more to
this
, countries will have more dominance towards other countries who lost their languages.
Such
 as English is used as
primary
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a primary language
language
 and English speaking countries are showing like America and Britain are influencing other countries. To recapitulate, it can be said that
this
 issue has both the aspects having an individual value and neither of them. Can be stated wrong, but still my point of view has shown
more significant value
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the more significant value
 to me.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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