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Nowadays education quality is very low. Some people think we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others believe that it will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both the views.

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Quality of
education
 has become a matter of discussion among people. Few experts believe that the students should be urged to judge and disapprove the
weingful
fruit that has fallen from the tree
windfall
wrongful
teachering
, while others
believe judging
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believe, judging
 teachers will have an outcome of students treating their teachers with contempt and indiscipline in the classrooms. Both the views are discussed
further
. There are
number
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a number
 of people who believe that students should be persuaded to evaluate their teachers. The main reason is that, there is a swelling number of competitors in educational institutes. So, in order to attract more
addmissions
the act of admitting someone to enter
admissions
additions
 the owners of institutes, focus on attractive facilities rather than quality
education
.
Also
, in recent years,
education
 has become more money oriented. Teachers just want to get more salaries.
Hence
, several are of the view that persuading students to criticise their teachers can provide better
education
.
On the contrary
, others believe letting students judge teachers and criticising them will have consequences
such
 as disrespect of teachers and chaos in the classrooms. The utmost cause of
this
 is students may start feeling superior than their teachers.
This
 is to say that if students are allowed to do so,
then
 they might behave as they have higher
authorites
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
 than teachers.
In addition
, the students may
also
 disturb the classroom proceedings and create unnecessary chaos. These are the reasons why some people think students should not
evalute
evaluate or estimate the nature, quality, ability, extent, or significance of
evaluate
evaluated
ovulate
 and criticise teachers. In conclusion, both the views have compelling reasons. Despite the fact that some people have
point
Suggestion
a point
points
 of view that students should give their judgement about teachers, some strongly feel it
maybe
Suggestion
may be
 disrespectful to the teachers.

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