You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do

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Dear Sir,

Iam

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I am

I'm

writing to express my displeasure that the

course

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work programme has been cancelled

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summer. One of the major

reason

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I chose to study

Businesss

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Business

English at your institute

because

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of the chance to participate in the work placement programme. There are many English Schools in London that offer Business English

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course

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, but not many who

oofer

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offer

the chance to go and work in a local company as part of their curriculum program. Your school offers more expensive tuition

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to others,

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however

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I was willing to pay extra because I thought the

course

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program was better quality. Now that they cancelled the program

Iam

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I am

disaapointed

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disappointed

because I have spent a lot of money. As the

course

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programme is now different to the one advertised, I would like to request a full refund of the money I have paid for

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course

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I am

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looking forward

for

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your prompt reply regarding

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matter.

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Faithfully, Donna May Samong

Fri Dec 20 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

160 words

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