IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, complain about the problem; propose action for the store to take; request confirmation that this is agreed

#product #store #work #manager #action #request #confirmation
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to report a technical fault
of
Change preposition
with
show examples
 the new television I bought from your Maharagama showroom. I ordered the TV
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
last
 Friday my bill number is DB051. Your delivery team brought the device yesterday evening.  Right away I unpacked the television and followed the manual to set it up.
However
, when I plugged it
to
Change preposition
into
show examples
 the power, there is sound coming out of it but no display. I check
Correct your spelling
everything
show examples
every thing
Correct your spelling
everything
show examples
 and went through the user manual several
time
Fix the agreement mistake
times
show examples
, but
still
Add a comma
,still
show examples
 I couldn't bring up the pictures. I am sure that
this
 TV box is a faulty one.
Hence
, please send me a replacement as soon as possible.
This
 time make sure that it works before sending it, that way we both can save our time.  Please make sure to send me a written
Correct your spelling
confirmation
show examples
conformation
Correct your spelling
confirmation
show examples
 that you are going to replace
this
 with a new television. Because sometimes I might go to the store with the faulty one to select a new TV myself. Yours faithfully,
Neminda
Correct your spelling
Namenda
 Harankahawa

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: