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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is Do you think job satisfaction is important

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Working people in a number of developing countries think of
job
 satisfaction as a privilege. While the degree can vary from one individual to another, it certainly holds true for most of them. In many developing economies like China, India and others,
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of the population
belong
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belongs
 to the middle-class group who engage in
variety
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a variety
 of jobs ranging from a driver to an MNC employee. The primary reason for them to have difficulty in finding happiness in their
job
 is that
such
 jobs are
most often
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more often
 than not taken up out of responsibility and not out of personal interest.
In other words
, livelihood, and not passion,
is
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are
 the driving force for people to engage in jobs.
Secondly
, the ever-increasing competition would mean that one does not have the luxury to refuse to a
job
 offer.
This
 leads to insecurity and people tend to take even menial jobs to earn decent money.
Thirdly
, the lack of adequate training
at
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in
on
of
work-place
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the workplace
workplace
workplaces
also
 leads to
job
 dissatisfaction. In my opinion, having
job
 satisfaction is very important as the burnout will be quite quick
otherwise
.
This
also
 directly affects productivity and can affect the overall economy of a country without any tangible reason.
Further
, only a satisfied employee can help create a better work environment for the peers and the organization as a whole. To conclude, while
job
 satisfaction is difficult to achieve, one should certainly aim to enjoy the work they do, keeping aside their insecurities. The employers should
also
 be more receptive
of
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about
 the problems faced by employees and should make sure that they are properly trained.

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