The social security provisions of Britain entails that the government will have to pay for the care of old aged people living in old age homes

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The social security provisions of Britain
entails
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entail
that the
government
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will have to pay for the
care
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of old aged people living in old
age
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homes, most of the times. The people living in
such
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homes are the ones who have come to stay there on their own will
or sometimes
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or, sometimes
left there
by
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with
their near and dear ones. In my opinion, the responsibility of bearing the cost of
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arrangement for continuous
care
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and nursing should be of the children and not the
government
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. Only in cases where the old aged person does not have someone to call his or her child, should be taken
care
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of on
government
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's exchequer. Every person wants to have a family with kids and a partner to go home to. People spend all their lives earning and making sure that they provide every necessity and comfort to their families, especially
to
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for
their children. They
supress
to put down by force or authority
suppress
and stifle their desires and wishes so that they can save for a secure future for themselves as well as their children. When children grow up, their demands increase with
age
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and parents make sure that they are fulfilled as much as possible within the financial constraints present at that moment. All
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changes
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change
in quite a lot of cases when the parents get old and it is time for the children to step up and take
care
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of them. At
this
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point, in quite a lot of cases, the children shrug off their responsibilities and leave their parents to the mercy of
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aid and
care
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of a nurse.
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is the time when the
government
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should step in, backed
with
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by
stringent laws, so that the children should bear all the cost
for
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of
the
care
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and facilities provided to their parents in old
age
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homes. To conclude, I would like to reiterate my stand, that it must be the
family which
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family, which
should be made to cover the expenses of old
age
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care
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rather than
government
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. No family should be allowed to dodge their responsibilities towards an old person or the parents when they reach the final stage of their lives. They must pay their dues.

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