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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

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The industrialization has led to a huge concentration of material resources around specific geographies thereby attracting a large number of immigrants from rural areas in search of livelihood
thus
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 leading to rapid urbanization and
creation
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the creation
 of
megacities
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.  These cities continue to offer a multitude of opportunities to its
residents but
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residents, but
 at the same time, their
infrastructure
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 is getting overwhelmed by the swelling population leading to problems in everyday life.  The essay will discuss what these problems are and will suggest whether the governments should encourage people to move to smaller regional towns to address these issues. More than half of the world's population now resides in urban areas compared to less than a quarter just half a century ago, considering that the overall population has grown over 100% during the same time, these two factors put together have put a tremendous strain on urban
infrastructure
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 leading to its near breakdown in certain cities especially in the developing countries.  As a consequence, city dwellers are facing a variety of problems in everyday life as more and more people vie for limited resources.  Areas including but not limited
to public
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to, public
 transport, access to clean drinking water, air pollution, congestion, astronomical real estate prices, rising inequality, crime, environmental degradation, deforestation are some of the problems governments and residents are grappling with as a consequence of uninhibited growth. So what is the solution?  Upgrade of
infrastructure
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 is
one but
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one, but
 it has its limitation on how much it can expand within a limited geographical area
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, there are issues inherent
to
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in
 a densely populated area like air, noise pollution,
unaffordable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
 real estate prices, long commute which cannot be addressed
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 one of the solutions is to create viable alternatives to these
megacities
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 by building regional towns which offer employment and a more balanced lifestyle.  The governments can encourage people to settle in these regional towns by offering perks
such
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 as proper
infrastructure
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, access to basic health care facilities, encourage business to invest by giving tax breaks and other incentives. To conclude, it seems that addressing the problems related to urbanization is to de-urbanize and builds smaller and
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 more manageable/liveable cities rather than investing more
into
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in
 the
infrastructure
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 of
megacities
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 as a good
infrastructure
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 alone is not a panacea to the challenges faced by urban dwellers.
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