We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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In the past few years technology has gone to a high level.Computers

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mobile phones are now considered as a

neccessity

the condition of being essential or indispensable

necessity

everywhere.We completely rely on

computers even

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computers, even

for doing simple tasks.All the information is stored easily and safely in it.There is no worry of losing documents as it was when there was paper documents used.There is an upgrade in technology

everyday

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every day

and don't know what the future holds.May be in a span of

few years

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a few years

we will get the food through computers

only and

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only, and

we can go to a place just by typing the name of it. In conclusion

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though it is a great achievement that we are using technology for most of our

work but

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work, but

too much reliance on it may be

destructing

draw someone's attention away from something

distracting

as it makes us lazy and being hooked to it all the time makes us distant from other people around.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

141 words

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