The government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Thus it’s the governments’ responsibility to ban alcohol and tobacco as they are addictive substances and harmful.How do you feel about this approach? do you agree or disagree ?

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many people believe that it is

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the responsibility

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to ban harmful substances

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the strongest one to prove my point is

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need to make some rules Nd regulation regarding that.

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all are the activities.

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need to take strict action on advertising of

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it should be warning

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intervention of authority it is not easy to control Nd monitor unhealthy substances

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should focus on safety of their civilians

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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