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Some people say history as one of the important school subjects, other people think that today’s world, subjects like science and technology or more in Porten than history discuss both of use and give your opinion.

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Education plays a vital role in one’s life. In today’s scenario most of the people think that his
history
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 is an essential part of student life.
On the other hand
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, most of the people prefer
science
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 and
t
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echnology both
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technology, both
are more substantial than
history
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. I
also
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 believe that
science
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 and
t
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echnology both are
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technology are both
r
eleavant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
irrelevant
to study because nowadays
technology
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 is becoming very fast.
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 those who urge that
history
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 is a crucial part of
school
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 subjects Because
history
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 provides a deep knowledge about their ancestors and
also
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, they come to know about the old traditions and cultures. To elaborate the living style of their ancestors how they live or more about their weapons those who use during the words.
Moreover
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, the ancient palaces of the old kings who ruled our world for thousands of years or c
enturies.
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Centuries
However
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, the other
school
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 of thought has a different opinion and they assert that nowadays the
technology
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 is significantly increased at fast pace which is extensive for every
school
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 student to study these relevant subjects for their good.
Besides
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, the
science
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 subject is very beneficial for an individual because it gives the student a general understanding of how things work in our world and the ability to cooperate better with the other fields more often.
Moreover
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,
t
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,
hese subjects provide a lot of job opportunities for an individual and
also
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,
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,
with a good package. To conclude, in my opinion, in
school
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 curriculum the
science
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 and
technology
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 are more substantial subject than
history
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 because it makes our future more bright and give us expertise which help us to make our future more secure and develop our nation.

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