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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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People have different views about the purpose of museums in modern society. While it’s true that
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museum
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the museum
 – as tourist attractions – should be fascinating, I stand by the idea that the main role of the
museum
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 is to give knowledge of cultural, religious and historical importance. On the one hand, it can be argued that museums should be entertaining and more attractive to the public. Museums are widely considered as important tourist attractions of any cities or countries.
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, there’s a common belief that they are too elitist, uninspiring and only encourage educated people to visit. By adding more entertainment values, museums can appeal to a broader audience. Nowadays there is
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 a wide range of museums which do not have academic purpose; but more light-hearted and humorous theme;
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; chocolate
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 in Belgium,
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museum
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 in South Korea,
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museum
a depository for collecting and displaying objects having scientific or historical or artistic value
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 of Broken Relationships in Croatia or
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the cheese museum
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 in The Netherlands.
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, I strongly believe that the main purpose of museums is to educate people as they exhibit collections of interesting objects that hold great cultural or historical values. The aim of any exhibitions is to teach visitors things that they didn’t know before. To achieve that, museums usually offer free guided tours with professional guides or give away brochures, guidebooks, audio tapes that contain detailed information about the exhibitions. By doing that, museums should play an important role in teaching people about
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the history
, culture, science and many other aspects of life. In conclusion, I think museums, as educational institutions, should offer educative, interesting and enjoyable experiences to visitors.
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