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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Citizen people want their
country
 to take an international sporting
event
.In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 view
,
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,
others believe that international sport
event
have
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has
 more problem than useful issue
.
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 In
this
assay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 I will explain both concepts and give examples and my belief
.
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First
,
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,
 if
country
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the country
 takes international sport
event
,
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,
it will help to increase
fainicial
involving financial matters
financial
 support of the
country
.
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Numbers of tourism will rise up
.
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 So the hotels will be occupied and other facilities like shopping
,
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,
 restaurants
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 will be used more so the investment of the
country
 dramatically improve..
Also
this
event
 will add history to the
country
 and give exceptional name to the
country
.
Second
 opinion of
people
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the people
 was seen negative point of
this
 festival, the number of people will increase and
this
is caused
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is causing
causes
 traffic congestion.
Furthermore
noisy pollution
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noisy, pollution
noise pollution
,
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,
 crowded area and may be
crime
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criminalized
.
or
introduces an alternative
Or
 frightening In my option I agreed with
first thought cause
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the first thought cause
 we need to see different cultures and encourage amazing events and sports
itwill
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it will
 help our government
.
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