Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays obesity and other
health
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issues are the major problem around the world. The most effective method in developing and improving
health
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is considered to be daily exercise. In my opinion
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
is the key to
health
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.
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However I
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also
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believe that diet is important. People who are working will not get enough time to do
there
of them or themselves
their
workouts because of
there
of them or themselves
their
busy
work
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schedules.
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They are many fitness seminars in cooperative sectors which suggest a
postures
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posture
of sitting and to move and take regular 2 minute intervals during
there
of them or themselves
their
working hours. Companies should open a small sports activities for
there
of them or themselves
their
employees to make them fit mentally and focus on
there
of them or themselves
their
work
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physically. As we find a range of
health
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problems is increasing tremendously its responsible for the individual to do regular
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
and maintain a nutritional diet.
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, its responsibility of government to open a
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campaigns
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campaign
in every organisation and make awareness to the public about it.
opening
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Opening
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
fitness centres in
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(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
locality and conducting a compulsory session of sports in every field of service can maintain a healthy
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environment. To conclude its
responsible
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responsibility
responsibilities
of every individual to maintain a good diet and exercise even during
there
of them or themselves
their
working hours by simply following a proper posture and by taking a regular breaks in between
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of them or themselves
their
work
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as
health
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is wealth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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