The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates regular physical activities performed by
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and women of different
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from Australia during the year 2010.
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, at least 40% of the people were involved in regular physical activities with the only exception being males from
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the age
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group
of 35 to 40, which was just under 40
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. Within all the
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covered, apart from
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the age
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15 to 24,
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the female
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percentage
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doing physical outnumbered
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the male
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percentage in all scenarios. The highest difference
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males
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and
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females
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is in the
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of 35 to 44, with 13%
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difference is in the
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of 65 and over, with 0.4%. There
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only one
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where
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of males involved in physical activities were over 50%, which was within the
age
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15 to 24 of 52.8%, the same instances for female occurred within three
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52.5%, 45 to 54 of 53.3% and 55 to 64 with 53%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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