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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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As we know that the more people we live with the more problems we have, so living alone or in small units will help us reduce major conflicts between relatives. Some research proved that when we live in a nuclear family or live on one’s own
also
 help us feel comfortable and relieve a lot of stress after busy days. Arguments between mother-in-law and daughter-in-law in some Oriental lands is no longer a problem in a family’s life. We will have more time for our small family, parents are more connected to children as children have a better educational environment. Another benefit of
this
 way of living is that we can learn how to be a self-
man which
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man, which
 is a valuable skill that we need for life and we can decide our days by
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the owner
. We
also
 have a more private place for ourselves where we used to share with others when we live in large family groups. No one can annoy us when we are
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focused
 on learning or working so the outcome will be better. To sum up, I think the appearance of
this
 tendency is a good news for human life because it can reduce most arguments with relatives and live in a world of freedom, where we can be who we are.
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