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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #technology #approach
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Education is a crucial aspect of life theses days and nearly
every body
all people
everybody
 tries to get one.
in
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In
 the old days traditional class based room learning was the norm things has changed with the new
technology
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 era and the school are taking a new approach to learning using
technology
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,
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,
this
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 essay will discuss the
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 and negative sides for using
technology
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 in education other than
traditinal method
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the traditional method
traditional method
traditional methods
 of teaching.
Technology
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 has made everything easier for the
poeple inculding
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people, including
people inculding
people including
poeple including
 teaching, students can now
accsess
the right to enter
access
 millions of books with ease because of the new devices that was not available in the past days, students
also
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 can get information about things in a split
second
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 all due to the new
technologyies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technologies
 that was
introduced the past decade
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introduced in the past decade
.
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.
 While there is
alot
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a lot
 if positive sides to the new ways of teaching it has a fair share of negative sides
also
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; one of them is that the student isn't able to focus when using
defferent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 kinds of devices
for
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example using
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example, using
 a tablet during class some students
accsess
the right to enter
access
accuses
accesses
 the wrong sites and by that the student is confused in
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
technology
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 introduced home
learing
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
 approaches so students can learn
whith
expresses the means used
with
 the comfort of staying at home
this
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 has a lot of
down sides
a negative aspect of something that is generally positive
downsides
 to it since the student isn't
emrged
come out into view, as from concealment
emerged
merged
 in a
laering
darkened by clouds
lowering
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 and won't get the best of information given to him.
Laerning
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Learning
 can be tricky these days with the
technology
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 so teachers
needs
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need
 to be careful with using it, in
conclusion there's
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conclusion, there's
is
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been
 good side and bad side to using new methods but the world is opting to
chose
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choose
 the new ways over the old
.
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