Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Traffic
c
Suggestion
C
is an increasing
problem
these days people may stay hours on the road just to get to their homes, while some people think that the government should act with building wider roads others; think
its
it is
it's
better to invest in better public
transportation
system
,
this
essay will discuss why building wider roads are good but why constructing trains and
subway
lines are ultimately superior.
Traffic
is modern
problem
for governments since back in the day people did not own a lot of cars
,
Accept space
,
so with
this
problem
becoming more and more severe people are more persistent for asking governments for wider roads to solve
this
issue example for how
this
problem
is
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
people a
Accept comma addition
people, a
study was conducted in Jordan on how much an average person spends time in
traffic
daily the results was that
everyday
Suggestion
every day
a average citizen spends 1 hours of his day in
traffic
in Amman, so solving
this
problem
is crucial to satisfy the community of
this
country and many others. Building train and
subway
was the
first
line of action in many developed countries to solve
this
problem
, while
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think that wide roads are important; building an
affordable easy
Accept comma addition
affordable, easy
transportation
system
is far better for all people since its always cheaper and more convenient to the whole
population
Accept comma addition
population, for
for example
a country like turkey who's got a good
transportation
system
has decreased their
traffic
density by 50% since building their
transportation
system
, since
then
their economy thrived and now can hold a lot of tourists without having to worry about the
traffic
. One of most leading problems in big cities right now is
traffic
so solving it would in fact solve most of the issues that comes with living in
big city
Suggestion
a big city
the big city
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think that a good
subway
line that connects the whole city is crucial for the people to prosper in doing their daily activities.
Traffic
is an increasing
problem
these days people may stay hours on the road just to get to their homes, while some people think that the government should act with building wider roads others; think
its
it is
it's
better to invest in better public
transportation
system
,
this
essay will discuss why building wider roads are good but why constructing trains and
subway
lines are ultimately superior.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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