The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#punishment #students #schools #decline #behaviour

During

olden days

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the olden days

, students were physically punished in schools. Some people claim that it must be re-introduced, so that the behaviour of students can be made better. I strongly disagree with

this

statement for reasons like, it will

inturn

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in turn

make them arrogant and insolent.

Firstly

, earlier days students received corporal punishments and it was observed that students developed an arrogant behaviour. Children when asked to kneel down outside

classroom

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the classroom

cirridor

an enclosed passageway; rooms usually open onto it

corridor

often felt

himiliated

subdued or brought low in condition or status

humiliated

. These little ones as they grow will start developing negative personality trait.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

86 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays, people move from one country to another for work. Some people think children of these families suffer because of this, while others think it is helpful for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and goverments can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some languages are increasingly spoken in different countries, while the use of others is rapidly declining. Is this or native development?