The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

During
olden days
Suggestion
the olden days
, students were physically punished in schools. Some people claim that it must be re-introduced, so that the behaviour of students can be made better. I strongly disagree with
this
statement for reasons like, it will
inturn
Suggestion
in turn
make them arrogant and insolent.
Firstly
, earlier days students received corporal punishments and it was observed that students developed an arrogant behaviour. Children when asked to kneel down outside
classroom
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the classroom
in
cirridor
an enclosed passageway; rooms usually open onto it
corridor
often felt
himiliated
subdued or brought low in condition or status
humiliated
. These little ones as they grow will start developing negative personality trait.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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