The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. T1 Bar Charts - EducationT

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant. 

T1 Bar Charts - EducationT
The bar charts illustrate, how many male and female
student
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students
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were enrolled in tertiary
education
and ,whether, they were
receiveing
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receiving
full-time or part-time
education
in
Britan
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Britain
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in three time
period
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periods
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as follow 1970-71, 1980-81,
1990
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and 1990
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-91.
Overall
,
it is clear that
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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receiveing
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receiving
full-time
education
were greater in number throughout these three periods and female full-time
education
recivers
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receivers
numbers increase sharply,
while
part-time
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the part-time
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study was less popular among male and female
students
in these periods. With respect to full-time
eduction
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education
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in 1970-
71
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,71
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almost one million men were studying full-time,
while
, only around thirty to
fourty
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forty
thousand part-time
students
were present.
On the other hand
, females
receiveing
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receiving
full-time
education
were seventy
lacs
and those
receiveing
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receiving
part-time
education
were around twenty thousand only. In the following period (1980-81)
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of full-time
students
dropped down to
ninty
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ninety
lacs
,
while
, female numbers increased from sixty to eighty
lacs
. Male and
female
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females
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revceiveing
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receiving
part-time
eduction
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education
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were
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was
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fourty
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forty
and fifty thousand respectively. In the final period of 1990-91
number
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the number
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of
female
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females
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receiveing
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receiving
full-time
education
dramatically increased to 1.1 million highest of all studies and all periods,
while
male
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the male
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students
number remained
same
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the same
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at around eighty
lacs
. Those
receiveing
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receiving
part-time
education
were about fifteen and twenty
lacs
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, students, lacs with synonyms.
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