The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. T1 Bar Charts - EducationT

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The bar charts illustrate, how many male and female

student

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students

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were enrolled in tertiary

education

and ,whether, they were

receiveing

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receiving

full-time or part-time

education

Britan

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Britain

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in three time

period

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periods

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as follow 1970-71, 1980-81,

1990

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and 1990

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-91.

Overall

it is clear that

male

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males

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and

female

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females

show examples

receiveing

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receiving

full-time

education

were greater in number throughout these three periods and female full-time

education

recivers

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receivers

numbers increase sharply,

while

part-time

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the part-time

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study was less popular among male and female

students

in these periods. With respect to full-time

eduction

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education

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in 1970-

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,71

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almost one million men were studying full-time,

while

, only around thirty to

fourty

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forty

thousand part-time

students

were present.

On the other hand

, females

receiveing

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receiving

full-time

education

were seventy

lacs

and those

receiveing

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receiving

part-time

education

were around twenty thousand only. In the following period (1980-81)

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the numbers

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numbers

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number

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of full-time

students

dropped down to

ninty

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ninety

lacs

while

, female numbers increased from sixty to eighty

lacs

. Male and

female

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females

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revceiveing

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receiving

part-time

eduction

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education

show examples

were

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was

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fourty

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forty

and fifty thousand respectively. In the final period of 1990-91

number

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the number

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female

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females

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receiveing

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receiving

full-time

education

dramatically increased to 1.1 million highest of all studies and all periods,

while

male

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the male

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students

number remained

same

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the same

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at around eighty

lacs

. Those

receiveing

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receiving

part-time

education

were about fifteen and twenty

lacs

, respectively.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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203 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. T1 Bar Charts - EducationT

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

These days people spend more and more time at work and less time at home. What are advantages and disadvantages of this?

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