For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and Math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skills be made as fourth skill to the list. To what extent do you agree?

Prevention of the diseases by
premodial
having existed from the beginning; in an earliest or original stage or state
primordial
interventions
such
as avoidance of a sedentary lifestyle should be followed rather than spending huge budgets on cure of obesity.
This
essay completely agrees with the statement owing to the benefits of early interventions.
To begin
with, nowadays, most of the
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
are being health
consious
intentionally conceived
conscious
with the determination that wellbeing is the most precious jewel of a person. A myriad of technical invention has
occured
come to pass
occurred
for early diagnosis and treatment of diseases before they reach to fatal stage.
Moreover
,
such
models for prevention of varieties of diseases create unlimited benefits to the people.
For instance
, consumption of
balanced diet
Suggestion
a balanced diet
and avoidance of
unhygienic
food can
prevents
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prevent
a
Suggestion
an
individual from being overweight.
Secondly
,
treatment
Suggestion
the treatment
of a disease after its incidence create considerable drawbacks
such
as the higher cost of medical procedures, repeated follow up in
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
centres and unable to perform daily living activities which can
leads
Suggestion
lead
to an economic burden to family and self.
In addition
to
this
,
person
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a person
the person
people
persons
might
also
suffer from
pshychological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
stress. To illustrate, people suffering from obesity
has
Suggestion
have
detrimental effects on him and supportive members. In conclusion, from my
prespective it
Accept comma addition
perspective, it
perspective it
is far
beneficial
Suggestion
more beneficial
to have controlled on body weight by following healthy lifestyle techniques
such
as proper diet, regular exercise rather than its treatment after an
occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
because of the drawbacks of the higher spending on medicine, restriction of works.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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