Study shows that many criminals have a low level education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

The number of crimes recorded in the past few years has greatly increased
allover
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all over
the world.If we talk about the developing countries like Pakistan, India, Bangladesh
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
it is seen that many young people are involved in serious crimes like drug dealing, gang rape,
robbies
an acute viral disease of the nervous system of warm-blooded animals (usually transmitted by the bite of a rabid animal); rabies is fatal if the virus reaches the brain
rabies
rabbis
rubies
and other street crimes. In many cases it is observed that the criminals have
low level
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low levels
a low level
of education. Education can be considered as
one
of the strongest reasons out of the other major reasons that include poverty
,
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,
habitual act of
crime
or bad company. Low level of education
leads
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lead
to frustration and
anxiety specially
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anxiety, specially
while not finding a reasonable job to earn basic bread and butter for
one
's family.
Thus
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Thus, this
this
leads to a man thinking about easier means to earn.Committing a
crime
is considered far
more easier
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easier
than finding a job for most uneducated people.Education expands the
abillity
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
to find ways and
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
helps in
recoginizing
accept (someone) to be what is claimed or accept his power and authority
recognizing
recognising
the difference between right and wrong. An educated person might find it difficult to commit a
crime
as he or she has the ability to think for possible and
more suitable
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most suitable
means to earn rather than becoming a criminal.Family backgrounds and lifestyle of educated people will never encourage
such
wrong activities. I would agree with people who believe that the best way to reduce
crime
is to educate criminals in the
prison
.
This
will prove helpful for them to find a decent job when they leave the
prison
.Educating criminals in the
prison
will give them a chance to think
positive
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positively
about themselves. It will help them to change their mindset. Education helps you to think out of the box,
likewise
these people will think of different opportunities that never crossed their mind.It will help them to act and think wisely.They will be utilizing their time more effectively in
prison
this
way. I believe if a person finds a suitable means of earning that helps him or her to fulfil the basic needs, no
one
would ever think of committing a
crime
.In my
opinion no
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opinion, no
one
would like to waste the precious years of their life in
prison
if they have enough to feed themselves and their loved ones.
Thus in
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Thus, in
the
end I
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end, I
would agree that education will prove to be a
millstone
stone post at side of a road to show distances
milestone
in changing the mindsets of the people in
prison
and especially help them to lead a reasonable decent life after completing their term in the
prison
.

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