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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that scientific advancement will be able to extend the average life of human beings. Despite the fact that
this
 scientific breakthrough may give the chance to mankind to spend much more time with their loved ones, it might endanger the whole world, especially: nature, accommodation, overpopulation and lack of nutrition. I am going to shed some light on the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, each and every human who lives on the earth had been taught about immortality once in their lifetime so
this
 discovery would make them cheer. Living for about a century or above may be a great opportunity for the elderly to become perfect and
also
 help youngsters to obtain more experience, in spite of their age.
Therefore
, the older generation will have much more leisure time to spend with their folks, friends and their grandchildren,
in particular
.
On the other hand
,
this
 lifespan expanding will cause adverse influence both on the globe and the young generation. The youngest may have to work harder in order to satisfy the elderly need,
also
 they should play the role of a nurse for their parents at home,
for example
.
Thus
, the senior generation will put their burdens on their children and grandchildren's shoulders.
In addition
, the world will need to extend food resources due to overpopulation, which is rarely possible with global warming.
This
 trend undoubtedly will devastate nature owing to overusing the oxygen, nutrition and minerals. To conclude,
although
 people wish to have a longer lifespan, I think science should not go against the law of nature as it will aggravate the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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