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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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The moment a child is born, parents start thinking for the best options of schools. Learning how to behave does not specify to a good or a bad school.Many countries are facing severe problems when it comes to student behaviour. Bulling, teasing
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hitting are some common examples. There can be many different causes for a child to behave badly. Some deals with the mental and others with his physical condition. Common causes can be the number of students being high in the class, making it different for the teacher to reach out to everyone.Seeking attention and a desire for power can lead to an aggressive mindset. Looking for revenge either from the classmate or the teacher can be one of the reasons.Some of the students develop the fear
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 hungry
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 sick or simply the victim of sudden change in the routine may demonstrate a troubling attitude. In my opinion
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there can be many solutions to the issue. Listen when the student has something to express in the class. Be realistic about the child's abilities. Decrease the number making it easy for the teacher to have one to one conversation.Identify the problem and look for possible solutions.Discussing the performance in private can be quite fruitful.Offering more interesting and challenging tasks.I believe, a trained teaching staff can easily deal with the cause at a basic level.Teachers are like parents and with a little patience they can address the students conduct both mentally and physically.
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