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Some people argue that arts such as painting are waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services

#people #arts #waste #money #government #services
It is considered by some that
government
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the government
 should allocate
huge amount
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huge amounts
a huge amount
 of
money
 to develop public services rather than on
arts
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the arts
.
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.
 In my opinion
,
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,
 I think
,
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,
although
,
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,
 it is important to give priority and spend
money
 on public services spending some
money
 on
arts
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the arts
 is not a waste
.
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.
 Nowadays, most of the countries
has
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have
 poor public services
such
 an education
,
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,
 health and transportation rule to lack
of sufficient
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sufficient money
money
. Quality public services helps to
uplifs
fill with high spirits; fill with optimism
uplift
 any
country
's as well as
peoples
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peoples'
 economy level
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 well established quality public services elevate the overall well being of any person live in the
country
.
For
example spending
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example, spending
money
 and developing
education system
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an education system
the education system
 in any
country
 helps to make more productive intelligence
work force
the force of workers available
workforce
 to increase the
country
's productivity.
Furthermore
,
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,
 improving public health leads to have a healthy
,
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,
 happy people with higher life expectancy.
However developing
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However, developing
 the
countries
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country
 entertainment
side proding
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side, prodding
side prodding
side providing
 some
money
 is
also
 helpful to maintain culture and traditional values. Every
country
 has unique cultural values and depict
these value
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these values
this value
 through arts
such
 as painting
,
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,
 drama and music help to uplift peoples creativity and artistic talent while improving tourism industry
.
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.
for
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For
instanse
an occurrence of something
instance
,
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,
sri
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Sri
Sir
lanka
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Lanka
 is
country
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a country
the country
 which has unique culture and every year government spend one
third
 of their budget to build and refurbish museums, art galleries
,
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,
preserve ancient carvings and promote tourism through these arts
.
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.
This
 helps
country
 and local people to enhance the income level as providing accommodation, food and transportation for tourists. In conclusion, while giving priority to improve public services spending
money
 to improve arts is essential for any
country
 to maintain a unique environment.
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