You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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It is believed that the high sales of trending goods among buyers are

result

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the result

of powerful

which is not

authentic

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an authentic demand

demand

of the market and society. I absolutely agree with

this

point of view and I think that majority of

make people to purchase for unnecessary items.

However some

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However, some

advertising

give

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gives

people information about know how product.

First

of all production of new product doesn’t mean that there

exist

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exists

real

demand

of the product. Artificial

demand

is created by

Marketing team

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the marketing team

the Marketing team

of any manufacture company to sell their products.

For example

the promotion of

new Iphone

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the new iPhone

new iPhone

new IPhone

11 which shows how many cameras it has

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high quality of pictures.

However it

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However, it

is not so different from

previous edition

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the previous edition

previous editions

of the same

iphone

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iPhone

. In the result of

this

millions of people bought new

iphones

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iPhones

phones

iPhone

in order to alter

iphone

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iPhone

although

it was not required so far.

Secondly people

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Secondly, people

overconsumption

of goods because of unreliable

and psychological

affect

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

effect

. There are some examples of increasing sales by ‘right’ marketing strategy to change

psychology

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the psychology

of human.

For instance

sales of Orbit gums were doubled after

on TV where actor used two gums

instead

of one. Another example is usage of toothpaste where actor used three or even five

time

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times

more toothpaste than it was required. All these examples proved that human used goods improperly and sales of these goods would fall down in the case of learning. To conclude huge manufacture companies make human buy consumer goods which is not necessary by psychological influence and artificial

demand

Thu Jan 02 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

260 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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