You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

It is believed that the high sales of trending goods among buyers are
result
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the result
of powerful
advertisement
which is not
authentic
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an authentic demand
demand
of the market and society. I absolutely agree with
this
point of view and I think that majority of
advertisement
make people to purchase for unnecessary items.
However some
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However, some
advertising
give
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gives
people information about know how product.
First
of all production of new product doesn’t mean that there
exist
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exists
real
demand
of the product. Artificial
demand
is created by
Marketing team
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the marketing team
the Marketing team
of any manufacture company to sell their products.
For example
the promotion of
new Iphone
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the new iPhone
new iPhone
new IPhone
11 which shows how many cameras it has
an
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a
high quality of pictures.
However it
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However, it
is not so different from
previous edition
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the previous edition
previous editions
of the same
iphone
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iPhone
. In the result of
this
advertisement
millions of people bought new
iphones
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iPhones
phones
iPhone
in order to alter
iphone
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iPhone
10
although
it was not required so far.
Secondly people
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Secondly, people
do
overconsumption
of goods because of unreliable
advertisement
and psychological
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
. There are some examples of increasing sales by ‘right’ marketing strategy to change
psychology
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the psychology
of human.
For instance
sales of Orbit gums were doubled after
advertisement
on TV where actor used two gums
instead
of one. Another example is usage of toothpaste where actor used three or even five
time
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times
more toothpaste than it was required. All these examples proved that human used goods improperly and sales of these goods would fall down in the case of learning. To conclude huge manufacture companies make human buy consumer goods which is not necessary by psychological influence and artificial
demand
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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