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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table represents the data about the independent film released in
UK
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 and
republic
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the republic
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 of Ireland in
different
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genre
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genres
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 in
year
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 2012.
Overall
, the highest
number
 of
releases
 with
similar
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figure
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 was recorded for the
genre
drama
 and
documentary
,
while
 the percentage of revenue generated from the
ticket
 sales of both is quite less. The lowest
number
 of
release
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releases
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 is recorded for
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a biopic
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biopic
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.
However
, the percentile of
income
 from the
ticket
 sale is maximum for comedy and horror followed by
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 as compared to other genres. There was exactly the same
number
 of
releases
 for
drama
 and
documentary
that is
 35, the figure for both remains similar for the percentage of all the
releases
 which ranges to 23.6.
However
, the percentage of
income
 was quite less from the sales of
ticket
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tickets
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of
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 both
drama
 and
documentary
,
that is
 8.5% for
drama
 and 2.9% for
documentary
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the documentary
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.
While
,
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 comedy was the
second
 largest
contributing
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in
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 the
number
 of
releases
 having
range
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a range
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26
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.
Apart from
this
, the revenue generated by the sales of comedy
genre
ticket
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tickets
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 was
maximum
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the maximum
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, accounting
to
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 45.4%.
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 of
releases
 of
biopic
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the biopic
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, action, romance, crime and other genres of movies was less than 10, comprising
of
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only 5.1% money generation but
exception
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 was there in
case
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 of
biopic
 movies which
generates
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 9.1% of
income
. In terms of horror and thriller, the
number
 of
releases
are
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 marginally similar (14 and 13 respectively). But the
income
 generated from the thriller
genre
 (1.3%) was sharply less than that of horror movies (20.2%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words genre, number, releases, drama, documentary, ticket, biopic, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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