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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting you and others suggest what could be done about it

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my discontent regarding the bus service, provided by your company in our
area
. The service is extremely terrible which has created
unmanageable
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 and unavoidable
situation
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 in the
area
 of my residence. My name is Sunny and I live in Salmiya, Block 10. The
area
 is on the outskirts of the city. The residents of the
area
, including me, are daily commuters of the bus service provided by your establishment.
However
, during the
last
 few weeks, your
buses
 are making reoccurring delays and
that is
 affecting our arrival at the workplace. To add more grief, some
buses
 are not coming at all, resulting
some
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 of us
to hail
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 a taxi to reach our office. Sometimes,
this
 situation forces me and some other commuters to take congested
buses
 and stand all the way in miserable
condition
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 to reach our office. I suggest you
to
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look into
this
 issue and add few more
buses
 in our
area
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Sunny Bhat
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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