There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting you and others suggest what could be done about it

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my discontent regarding the bus service, provided by your company in our
area
. The service is extremely terrible which has created
unmanageable
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an unmanageable
the unmanageable

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and unavoidable
situation
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situations

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in the
area
of my residence. My name is Sunny and I live in Salmiya, Block 10. The
area
is on the outskirts of the city. The residents of the
area
, including me, are daily commuters of the bus service provided by your establishment.
However
, during the
last
few weeks, your
buses
are making reoccurring delays and
that is
affecting our arrival at the workplace. To add more grief, some
buses
are not coming at all, resulting
some
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in some

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of us
to hail
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hailing

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a taxi to reach our office. Sometimes,
this
situation forces me and some other commuters to take congested
buses
and stand all the way in miserable
condition
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conditions

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to reach our office. I suggest you
to
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apply

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look into
this
issue and add few more
buses
in our
area
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Sunny Bhat
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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