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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

#people #computer #telephone #job #home
Nowadays, a lot of people have
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
an opportunity
 to
work
 from home
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 a big part of duty can be
do
Suggestion
done
remoutly
in a remote manner
remotely
. And almost everyone
ownes
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
owns
owned
 a PC and a
cellphone
Suggestion
cell phone
. In my opinion people will
work
 at
office
Suggestion
the office
 less in the future and I am glad about it. If people live in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 or in
big city
Suggestion
a big city
big cities
the big city
, they have to spend hours to get to job and back home. I live in
villidge neably city
Suggestion
a village nearby city
villidge nearby city
the village nearby city
village nearby cities
village neably city
village nearby city
 where my
office
 locates. I lost two hours per day,
that is
 almost five hundred hours per year. It is a huge
coutn
(film) a still picture that is introduced and that interrupts the action of a film
cut-in
curtain
count
 of time. I would like to spend
this
 time in
enather
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 way, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can not. My boss does not let
my
objective form of "I"
me
work
 from home. From company
view it
Accept comma addition
view, it
 is more cheaper. They should not support a big
office
 for all staff. Several
emploers
Suggestion
Employers
Employees
Emploers
 have to be in
front
Suggestion
the front office
office
for example
, but a the biggest size of
work
Suggestion
the work
 is done online.
Also
 company can invite worker from
everywere
to or in any or all places
everywhere
. In
this
 case they can find
the better
Suggestion
the best
 worker for the
smoller
small or little relative to something else
smaller
similar
 money. For company I can see only
profe
any factual evidence that helps to establish the truth of something
proof
prof
profit
.
Lile
disadvangage
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
 I would have to say that co-workers interact less. And for someone, who live alone and does not have friends, it can be a problem. Whatever I think it is very good idea
remout
located far away spatially
remote
 job. From one side workers save their time, from other side companies save
theyr
of them or themselves
their
 money.
Everbody
Suggestion
Everybody
 is happy. So people will find way to live and
work
 more convinion
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