some people believe that adults get motivated to exercise and play sports because of the major sports events on tv such as olympic games and football world cup.Others believe that there are many ways apart from tv to encourage them to exercise.Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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is believed

by some people that some adults are motivated to

exercise

and play sports events

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while others believe that there are

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varying

varied

ways

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a fully developed person from maturity onward

adults

can motivation to

exercise

.I believe that the others ways of

exercise

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motivated

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motivate

adults to

exercise

Although

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people believe that

adolecents

a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity

adolescents

get their motivation and play sports by watching

major sports event

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major sports events

on tv because they can know and aware about their teams quest for success

also

get to see role models playing sports on television.

However

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refers to the speaker or writer

do not think that it is the only effective way to inspire

adolecents

a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity

adolescents

or others. In my point of view

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there are other several ways to impel grown-up people to

exercise

which

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totally agree with that.

Gyming

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yoga

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martial arts

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owning

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cycling

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walking and climbing

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these are the alternatives of watching tv and get impel.By joining fitness club adults can do their

exercise

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exerice

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercises

exercise

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yoga

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martial arts

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these gymnastics helps them to keep fit physically

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mentally cause it will will remain your body active

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energatic

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energetic

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fruitful and refresh your mind which is

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required by rule

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for all mankind.

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gymnastics, but

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healthy diet is very significant to lead healthy-wealthy lifestyle.Everyone should do their proper diet and maintain

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accuracy

.Following these all

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adults can have a goo lifestyle. In conclusion

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adults get

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motivated

exercise

from watching sports programmes or any others

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I believe that adults can more inspiration from other several ways rather than watching tv.They can try both

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one is more effective for all mankind.

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