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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Preserving the natural environment has become very crucial as manufacturing of consumer products on a large scale has lead to environmental disturbance. People needs have changed over the period of time which has caused immense damage to the natural surroundings. There are many ways where
this
 issue can be controlled, we shall continue to discuss in
next
 paragraphs. Cutting down the trees is the major cause of natural imbalance. In our live plants/trees are the major source of fresh air. Trees have been cut down in order to meet the increased demand for
.
Accept space
.
 Rubber, Paper, etc. The Government should impose heavy fine
such
 people or they should be put behind the bars if they cause any harm to these natural resources. Another important cause of the extinction of natural resources is the increased demand for land. Mountains, forests and barred field are being used to construct huge buildings and malls.
Such
 land should be used for growing or planting more trees
instead
 of selling thousand acres of land to MNCs or selfish builders. Educating children at the young age can help to preserve these precious resources from getting extinct. To conclude, civilians and government should go hand in hand in order to preserve these resources.
Instead
 of using natural resources, alternative ways should be found to meet the increased demand of the population.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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