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Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who is your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now? Give your opinion.

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It goes without saying that kids are the future leader
for
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of
 every
countries
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country
. We have to give concentration not only in the
baby
 education, but
also
 in their caring. Nowadays both father and
mother
 are busy for earning
money
 rather than taking
care
 of their babies. I believe that every
mother
 should take the responsibility of taking
care
 of the kids at the early age no matter how busy she might be. In my following paragraph I will explain my point of views with some relevant examples prior to give a reasoned conclusion. At the very outset of my paragraph I would like to mention
first
 point, no one else in
this
 world take
care
 one
baby
 better than a
mother
. One
mother
 is the primary teacher of a kid. To cite an example, one
mother
 can only understand the demand of a small
baby
 at the initial phase rather the a day
care
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 or a servant.
Moreover
, girls are born to be a
mother
. It can be said that, God gives some supernatural power to every
mother
 to take
care
 of their
baby
, we have to respect
this
. Another most crucial reason would be that, it may be risky to depend on other regarding
baby
 caring issue. In
present world
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the present world
, we can see thousands of day
care
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 who
are demanding
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is demanding
 that, they can take
care
 of babies in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of
parents
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the parents
. In short, they are doing fake promise. According to Daily Star news published on March 23, 2017 that, 11 children were
died
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dying
 during milk feeding time because at a popular day
care
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
. Later on they found that there was melamine on that milk power. Some people may argue that every
girls
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girl
have
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has
 the right to work and earn
money
. It is true that both girls and boys have the opportunity to
work but
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work, but
 it is
also
 true that your
baby
 is your future hand. Every
mother
have
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has
 to spend time for their kids till grown up.
This
 argument is neither logical nor scientific because
money
 will not
exist whereas
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exist, whereas
 your kid will stand beside you in
future
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the future
. To sum up, it can be said that, in
this
 materialistic world we are running behind the
money
,
parents
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the parents
 have to manage both personal and professional
life but
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life, but
 every
mother
 should leave their job while her
baby
 is in upbringing phase.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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