Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days when anyone apply for the
job
they have been asked to provide their personal
data
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data, for
for
example they
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example, they
bachelor or married, what are the interest and hobbies and even these days employers inquire about the social media accounts for
eomployee
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
to know the candidate applying for the
job
. At some extent taking personal data can be irrelevant and risky as well. These days all digital foot prints
can be expose
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can expose
can be exposed
with some efforts. All employees personal data can be
compromise
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compromised
by breaching their privacy. For
job
applicants it can be for more time investing because many of them must be active
job
seekers and
instead
of looking for other opportunities they will waste all their precious time in providing personal data.
However
, knowing interest and hobbies of the company can be fruitful for the company. As we know good
employee
can be
long term asset
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a long term asset
for the company.
For
example if
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example, if
a person having a habit to update himself/herself in their professional
field
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field, then
then
employer
don't have
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doesn't have
to worry about the skill of
employee
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employing
.
Furthermore
, if a
job
hunter will mention his/her
martial
of or relating to the state of marriage
marital
status it will be easy for him/her
for
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to
negotiate jobs terms and condition.
For
example two
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example, two
of my friends they got
job
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jobbed
abroad. One of them
mention
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mentions
in the interview that he is married, he got the family visa for the his wife and kids.
Other
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Another
one didn't declare that he is married and now he had to travel alone without his wife and son. In my opinion employers should know everything about the
employee
because that
employee
will be precious asset and investment for the employer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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