Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days when anyone apply for the

job

they have been asked to provide their personal

data

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data, for

for

example they

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example, they

bachelor or married, what are the interest and hobbies and even these days employers inquire about the social media accounts for

eomployee

a worker who is hired to perform a job

employees

to know the candidate applying for the

job

. At some extent taking personal data can be irrelevant and risky as well. These days all digital foot prints

can be expose

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can expose

can be exposed

with some efforts. All employees personal data can be

compromise

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compromised

by breaching their privacy. For

job

applicants it can be for more time investing because many of them must be active

job

seekers and

instead

of looking for other opportunities they will waste all their precious time in providing personal data.

However

, knowing interest and hobbies of the company can be fruitful for the company. As we know good

employee

can be

long term asset

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a long term asset

for the company.

For

example if

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example, if

a person having a habit to update himself/herself in their professional

field

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field, then

then

employer

don't have

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doesn't have

to worry about the skill of

employee

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employing

Furthermore

, if a

job

hunter will mention his/her

martial

of or relating to the state of marriage

marital

status it will be easy for him/her

for

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negotiate jobs terms and condition.

For

example two

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example, two

of my friends they got

job

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jobbed

abroad. One of them

mention

Suggestion

mentions

in the interview that he is married, he got the family visa for the his wife and kids.

Other

Suggestion

Another

one didn't declare that he is married and now he had to travel alone without his wife and son. In my opinion employers should know everything about the

employee

because that

employee

will be precious asset and investment for the employer.

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job application
personal information
hobbies and interests
marital status
relevant
useful
privacy
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