In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Many old aged people in Britain
lives
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live
in
a
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an
old aged homes. There are nurses and other people available for the help for those old aged people.
Government
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The government
bear
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bears
all the cost related to these old aged homes sometimes.
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a fall in Asia or specially from where I belong there is no concept of leaving your parents to the old aged homes. Family should be responsible for the taking care of their elders. So, when
family
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the family
is responsible they bear all the expenses of the elders. But as a citizen of
country
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a country
the country
or as a taxpayer
of
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in
the country,
country
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the country
should
also
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be liable
for
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to
take
responsible
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responsibility
responsibilities
of their citizens.
Obviosuly
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Obviously
old people paid taxes for all their life so, in the end phase of their lives they deserve to get some rewards from the
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
as well. And as we know in
this
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new era getting medical assistance and medicines getting
expensive so
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expensive, so
, someone
have
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has
to come forward to take
responsible
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responsibility
for their citizens. In the
end I
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end, I
would say both government and the families should have
contirbute
bestow a quality on
contributed
counterpart
for their old ones. But government is more responsible because they collect tax for
whole lives
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the whole lives
of the
people despite
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people, despite
the fact that some of them may not need the
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
provided by the government in the end.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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