The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
is a graph of a
university
in Canada that demonstrate how many students passed out from the
University
during 1992-2007. In
this
graph
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they clearly represent the
number
of
female
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a female
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and male
student
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students
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by different
colour
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colours
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Of the line. From 1992 to 2006 the
number
of
the
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graduate
is
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enormously increased.
Although
the
number
of Female graduates is higher than the
number
of male graduates. In some years the graph
indicating
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that there are fewer students who
graduate
in these particular years. From 1992 to 2006 the rising of Female
graduate
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graduates
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represent how substantially
university
generates an educated nation. The downfall
of
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graduate
numbers can be seen from 1998 to 2000. Perhaps from
2002
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,2002
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their graduates
rising
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rose
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, which shows the
university
's tremendous success.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words university, number, graduate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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