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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager.

#work #company #six #months #head #office #country #manager
Dear Sir, it's a pleasure writing to you. The purpose of writing
this
 letter to you is to show my interest in working in the company's
head
office
 in Britain for a period of six months. Having read about the
work
 environment in our Britain
head
office
 which promotes discipline and
hardwork
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hard work
, I would like to learn about
this
 core value so I can be able to inculcate them into our organization back here in Nigeria.
Also
, the use of
modern day
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 technology at the
head
office
 is
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too
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top
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 notch, which I feel makes
work
 more efficient, if I can be able to
work
 at the
head
office
 for at least a period of six months I will be able to learn
this
 modern technology put in place which
be
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 of great benefit to our company in Nigeria. And I will
also
 train other
staffs
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 in Nigeria on how to make use of
this
 modern technology. If I am given the opportunity to
work
 in our
head
office
, Mr Smith my assistant will be able to fill and act in my capacity in my absence. He is well dedicated to his duties and
well disciplined
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 which I believe he will be able to handle the department in my absence.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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