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Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing why do you thik it is happening what can be done by parents and teachers to reduce ut

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Nowadays, there are many
problem
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problems
 which are occurring in society and juvenile delinquency is a major dilemma. The
crime
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eate
a magnitude or frequency relative to a time unit
rate
it
 is increasing day by day. Society citizens are facing
problem
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problems
a problem
 and fight with them. Behind it there are many Reasons to increase the level of
crime
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 as well as it is an imperative to following some effective measures by parents and teachers to reduce it which will be mentioned in subsequent paragraphs. To embark with, there are many reasons why
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crime rate
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the crime rate
has growing
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is growing
has grown
.
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 and foremost reason is that these days, family structure changed
inti
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 nuclear both parenting are busy in their work and they do not have time to spend with their offspring. As a consequence, it puts
bad impact
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a bad impact
 on their child's bringing and they have lack
in
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of
 moral values.
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, unemployment is
also
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main cause
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the main cause
a main cause
 of increasing the
crime
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 among young people. Money is necessary for a
oerson
a human being
person
 to live their life
.
Accept space
.
 So, if they have not a good job, they do
crime
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 in the greed of money.
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 but not the least, bad influence or bad pre group are
also
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 a reason
to
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for
growing the
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the growing crime
crime
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 rate. Every lock has a key to open the right door, in
this
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 case there are many effective ways which
helps
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help
 to reduce the
crime
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 rate.
Firstly
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, parents should complete their impotent duty of their child to take proper care of them like
spend
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to spend
spending
 time with them give moral values learn ethics. Another significant way is the
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
 section for children which do help to
came
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come
 out from the wrong influence and helps to feel positive vibes. In conclusion, it is essential to
solvage
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
salvage
savage
 the
isse
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issue
 by following some effective measure. Juvenile delinquency is increasing only by lack of knowledge. Parents should keep close
watching
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watch
 on the moments of their child.

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