We live in a world of technology these days while the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages

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Genarally

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Generally

, everything has

bothe

two things or people together

both

sides

pors

in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)

pros

and

corns

an argument opposed to a proposal

cons

internet

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the internet

also

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has these sides In

this

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technology

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technological

world, everyone fully adopted by

internet

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the internet

and it brings us more and more

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

. Anyhow, it has some control and

secutity

the state of being free from danger or injury

security

issues but

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issues, but

nowadays its easily recover by security providers.

Firstly

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, in

this

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fashonated

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world, technology makes us to

modernlization

making modern in appearance or behavior

modernization

and

socializaion

the act of meeting for social purposes

socializing

socialization

socialising

most

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Most

of people still contact with each others

throug

from beginning to end

through

the social

medias

a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information

media

, despite they could not

being

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with

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direct touch, at the same time, most of us use it as a platform to improve their

knowldge

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

and being as a popular or

celebraty

a widely known person

celebrity

person.

For example

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, Alexander

babu

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Babu

, who is the very talented standup comedian, now he is being popular amongst

whole world

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the whole world

youtube

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YouTube

before that never know about him or his talent.

However

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Accept space

many people

continiously

at every point

continuously

suffer

with

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using the

socialmedias

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webpages

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web pages

due to some security problems. Facebook

instagram

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and others, which are the massive stage for sharing our personal

information

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information, therefore

therefore

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, people has

insufficent

of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement

insufficient

privacy and security.

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

word, important details of anyone

such

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as, bank

datas

a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn

data

details

, company accounts details and other private

informations

a message received and understood

information

are stolen by hackers and most of

time

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the time

these

valunerable

susceptible to attack

vulnerable

details has been

missused

used incorrectly or carelessly or for an improper purpose

misused

missed

by them.

For instance

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last

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year a man had hacked the one hundred fifty

peoples

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people

ATM details and

widrawed

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the

highes

greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount

highest

amount of money in India but he is caught by

indian

a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived

Indian

police within 24 hours. Drawing my conclusion, in

this

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21st era we can not

dwelling

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dwell

without internet because it offers us lots of advantages

eventhough

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even though

, it has lots of

disadvantages but

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disadvantages, but

each

countries

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country

has special branches for secure the people from cyber crimes.

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should aware about

this

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and we need to

extact

remove, usually with some force or effort; also used in an abstract sense

extract

the good side

from

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this

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technologies

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technology

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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291 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global connectivity
digital banking
cybersecurity
data protection
security breaches
cyber attacks
online transactions
digital divide
surveillance
freedom of information
responsible usage
ethical considerations
digital footprints
online behavior
information inequality

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We live in a world of technology these days while the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages

Fully explain your ideas

in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend sums of money on the construction of new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe that money should be spent on improving existing public transport discuss both views and give your opinion

The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweight the disadvantages?

Some people think that news has no connection with people’s lives; so it is a waste of time to read newspapers and watch television news programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.