We live in a world of technology these days while the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages

Genarally
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Generally
, everything has
bothe
two things or people together
both
sides
pors
in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)
pros
and
corns
an argument opposed to a proposal
cons
,
internet
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the internet
also
has these sides In
this
technology
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technological
world, everyone fully adopted by
internet
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the internet
and it brings us more and more
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
. Anyhow, it has some control and
secutity
the state of being free from danger or injury
security
issues but
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issues, but
nowadays its easily recover by security providers.
Firstly
, in
this
fashonated
world, technology makes us to
modernlization
making modern in appearance or behavior
modernization
and
socializaion
the act of meeting for social purposes
socializing
socialization
socialising
.
most
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Most
of people still contact with each others
throug
from beginning to end
through
the social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
, despite they could not
being
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be
with
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in
direct touch, at the same time, most of us use it as a platform to improve their
knowldge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
and being as a popular or
celebraty
a widely known person
celebrity
person.
For example
, Alexander
babu
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Babu
, who is the very talented standup comedian, now he is being popular amongst
whole world
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the whole world
by
youtube
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YouTube
before that never know about him or his talent.
However
,
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,
many people
continiously
at every point
continuously
suffer
with
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by
using the
socialmedias
or
webpages
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web pages
due to some security problems. Facebook
instagram
and others, which are the massive stage for sharing our personal
information
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information, therefore
therefore
, people has
insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
privacy and security.
On
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In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
word, important details of anyone
such
as, bank
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
details
, company accounts details and other private
informations
a message received and understood
information
are stolen by hackers and most of
time
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the time
these
valunerable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
details has been
missused
used incorrectly or carelessly or for an improper purpose
misused
missed
by them.
For instance
,
last
year a man had hacked the one hundred fifty
peoples
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people
ATM details and
widrawed
the
highes
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
highest
amount of money in India but he is caught by
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
police within 24 hours. Drawing my conclusion, in
this
21st era we can not
dwelling
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dwell
without internet because it offers us lots of advantages
eventhough
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even though
, it has lots of
disadvantages but
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disadvantages, but
each
countries
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country
has special branches for secure the people from cyber crimes.
we
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We
should aware about
this
and we need to
extact
remove, usually with some force or effort; also used in an abstract sense
extract
the good side
from
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of
this
technologies
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technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • digital banking
  • cybersecurity
  • data protection
  • security breaches
  • cyber attacks
  • online transactions
  • digital divide
  • surveillance
  • freedom of information
  • responsible usage
  • ethical considerations
  • digital footprints
  • online behavior
  • information inequality
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