We live in a world of technology these days while the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages

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Genarally

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Generally

, everything has

bothe

two things or people together

both

sides

pors

in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)

pros

and

corns

an argument opposed to a proposal

cons

internet

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the internet

also

has these sides In

this

technology

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technological

world, everyone fully adopted by

internet

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the internet

and it brings us more and more

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

. Anyhow, it has some control and

secutity

the state of being free from danger or injury

security

issues but

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issues, but

nowadays its easily recover by security providers.

Firstly

, in

this

fashonated

world, technology makes us to

modernlization

making modern in appearance or behavior

modernization

and

socializaion

the act of meeting for social purposes

socializing

socialization

socialising

most

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Most

of people still contact with each others

throug

from beginning to end

through

the social

medias

a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information

media

, despite they could not

being

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with

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direct touch, at the same time, most of us use it as a platform to improve their

knowldge

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

and being as a popular or

celebraty

a widely known person

celebrity

person.

For example

, Alexander

babu

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Babu

, who is the very talented standup comedian, now he is being popular amongst

whole world

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the whole world

youtube

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YouTube

before that never know about him or his talent.

However

Accept space

many people

continiously

at every point

continuously

suffer

with

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using the

socialmedias

webpages

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web pages

due to some security problems. Facebook

instagram

and others, which are the massive stage for sharing our personal

information

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information, therefore

therefore

, people has

insufficent

of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement

insufficient

privacy and security.

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

word, important details of anyone

such

as, bank

datas

a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn

data

details

, company accounts details and other private

informations

a message received and understood

information

are stolen by hackers and most of

time

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the time

these

valunerable

susceptible to attack

vulnerable

details has been

missused

used incorrectly or carelessly or for an improper purpose

misused

missed

by them.

For instance

last

year a man had hacked the one hundred fifty

peoples

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people

ATM details and

widrawed

the

highes

greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount

highest

amount of money in India but he is caught by

indian

a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived

Indian

police within 24 hours. Drawing my conclusion, in

this

21st era we can not

dwelling

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dwell

without internet because it offers us lots of advantages

eventhough

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even though

, it has lots of

disadvantages but

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disadvantages, but

each

countries

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country

has special branches for secure the people from cyber crimes.

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should aware about

this

and we need to

extact

remove, usually with some force or effort; also used in an abstract sense

extract

the good side

from

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this

technologies

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technology

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global connectivity
digital banking
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freedom of information
responsible usage
ethical considerations
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We live in a world of technology these days while the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages

Fully explain your ideas

There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food. Yet this is necessary if we are to meet the demands often increasing world population. Give your opinions on this.

More and more animal species are becoming extinct by human activities in land and sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employee rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Human activities have negative effects on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments