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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations.

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A lot of graduates and post-graduates stay with their loved one, whilst others live far from their home due to their educational institutions is in a distant location.
This
 essay will suggest that
although
 living alone far from the comfort zone can help a person to become independent as well as learn new culture, it could have demerits like homesickness and depression. The principle benefits of living far is it helps to know about personal dependency with other family members. In a nuclear family all members are some extent rely on others which makes family living more interesting and loving.
However
, staying in a distant place helps to grow because washing, cooking and cleaning all daily chores are necessary to do
besides
 study.
For example
, it has been seen in many different cases that people who lived alone fore a small period of time have some extracurricular activities compare to who did not stay far away.
In addition
 to it, study abroad or a different city helps individuals to learn a new language and culture. It is vital to learn the local customs and tongue while living in different cultural place. The major drawback of studying away from home is some students
become
Suggestion
becoming
 homesick and feel depressed. It is human nature to live with their loved one and when they are away from their precious person they feel sad. If their feelings are not positive, they cannot make friends because of the cultural barrier and constant missing of home.
For instance
, a research on suicidal tendencies among university students have shown that around more than seventy percentages foreign students have
this
 tendency because they feel depressed and anxious. In conclusion, spending time away from the family could make an individual independent and strong, but it could have a hazardous impact on mental health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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