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Some people think that the young children benefit from going to the nursery school before starting primary school. Others think it is better for the young children to stay all day with the families. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The appropriateness of preschools and nursery schools has always been a debated issue. It
should
Suggestion
Should
 be left
on
Suggestion
to
with
for
 the parents to weigh the pros and cons of nursery schools before deciding the either way.I will discuss both the views and provide my
prespective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
prospective
 in conclusion.
To begin
 with, nobody
can denies
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can deny
 the fact that preschool and kindergarten acts as a milestone for the future learning of every pupil because it provides them an opportunity to excel in their basic skills along with the qualities of life.
For instance
, during the formative period children can learn a plethora of qualities
such
 as
,
Accept space
,
teamwork and how to be friendly with their classmates.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
they can learn the basics of
language
Suggestion
the language
 as well as some skills; there are plenty of players who have inborn trait for these skills, can get recognition of particular
skull
an ability that has been acquired by training
skill
 at an early stage.
On the other hand
, masses holding the view to keep their children at home have their own supporting views, which
can not
can not
cannot
 be denied.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
,
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