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some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money do you agree or disadgree which other types of job should be highly paid

#people #entertainers #money #disadgree #job
According to the job payment will be given .People thi
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 that entertainers have more wages when consider with the other jobs.
Firstly
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that entertainers should be paid more.In some of the events without the entertainers we will feel bored. They are the one who conducts many things like games,songs,etc.
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hey s
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continuing in the same way
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d do hard work during the time of the function which is taking place.It is not a simple task to manage all the audience or the guests because few of them may not like the shows which is going on.They may interrupt at any situation.So,on the spot
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the organizers should change the other show.In those cases they should have so much patience and
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 the fluent knowledge about the event.
Secondly
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ider the film stars they will do so hard for the movie to get the success.They will do a tedious job for the cinema to get running,and takes Y
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ars together to complete the movie. The Software or the Information Technology people should be paid more as well.Because without the new technology, there is no world.As the technology increases human decreases,thereby it
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ecreases the work of the human.It is a disadvantage as well as advantage too.Pros reduce the burden cons is loosing of jobs.The good example is Robots,after intro
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ucing the robots the became very easy for the people.So,From where
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hose robots came? The answer is,it is devel
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ped by the IT Programmers.
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