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Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. What do you think about this?

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Tax
 rates have been ongoing debate for centuries. Some people argue that
tax
 rates should be instantiated. Others believe that higher
tax
 rates do not benefit us as much as we think.
This
 essay will discuss why I completely believe that the higher the
tax
 rates people pay, the better the quality of public services tends to be, but there
sould
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
would
 be a
limit
 to how much
governments
Suggestion
government
 can
tax
 someone. Public services,
such
 as education, transportation and health care rely on
taxation
. The more
tax
 people pay, the more these services improve.
This
 is due to the fact that a high
tax
 rate means that the government has more money to spend on its public services.
For instance
, countries with high
taxation
,
such
 as Australia and Sweden, have a solid infrastructure, whereas in other countries with low
taxation
 is quite the opposite.
Therefore
, there is a strong correlation between
tax
 rates and the condition of public services. While I support higher taxes, I believe that there should be a
limit
 on how much governments can
tax
 its citizens.
This
 is because if a person is taxed
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much, he or she can lose the motivation to work.
Although
 I think that rich people should be taxed even more than their counterparts, they still should be
incentivized
given an incentive to; motivate
incentivised
, to continue to climb the economic hierarchy. Clearly, without a
limit
 on
taxation
, many
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 would suffer. In conclusion, even though I completely believe that governments should increase taxes in order to improve its public services, it should not exceed a certain
limit
.
This
 is the only way to improve public service while ensuring that people are not affected negatively by it.
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