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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill should be made a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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In decades, the major constituents of
education
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 were reading
,
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writing and maths
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due to the improvisation of computers, recently there has been a thought in people’s mind that the
computer
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skill
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 should
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 be included
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,
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly believe and agree to the thought of making
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skill
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 as one of the basic skills of
education
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,
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,
computer
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 skills are likely to be more helpful for the people in maintaining their business and
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 to that it has become a part of our basic need
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 we use
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computer
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computers
the computer
a computer
 for everything in our
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 to
day
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 life, so it’s unequivocally important for people to learn how to use
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computer
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the computer
a computer
 and what are all the quests which we can accomplish with the help of the
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 in our
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 to
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 life.
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, the schools and primary
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 firms should
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 encourage the students to enrol themselves to the
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 based courses so that the learn the basics and they would
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 get an knowledge of the efficiency of the
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 ,
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 eventually moulds them to face the modern and fast moving
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 and the students would
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 cope up with the competitive environment , there are plethora of applications of
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 in the modern
world
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, so the ultimate aim of including the
computer
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skill
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 as one of the basic skills is to inculcate the variety of thoughts and innovations in the minds of the students so that they would come up with an revolutionary idea to develop the
world
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 and to make it a better place for people to live in. To conclude, making
computer
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skill
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 one of the basic skills of
education
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 is something which everyone in the
world
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 should encourage and
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 will in-turn make the splintering
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 legit and to defuse the workforce from the labours and to ease their work.

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